Ani May Queen

she began to prepare herself for, what she did not know yet, would be a very long day This seems to be a bit of cut and paste sentence. Just ...

Azzia reluctantly shut the yellowing with age book “Yellowing with age” seems out of order. Try just “the aged book” or “She shut the yellowing pages of the aged book” ...

Sure, you can use the message system here, or you can post it here and send me the link. Either way, I'll read it.

Thanks a lot! I know, word counts do stink. Grrrr...limiting my creativity!

Thanks a lot Spoink. I took your advice about adding in a better transition (you have no idea how I had to fidget and fudge to meet the world count!) ...

Firestarter, I love you! A lot of the things you pointed you were really helpful. I can't change them all right now, seeing as I have to go prepare a ...

Vampire Kisses, I think I read that. It was pretty good if I remember corectly.

I just bought Uglies but I'm saving it to read on vacation. I'm really glad someone thinks its good, now I'm happy a bought it instead of the other ones ...

I'm a James Patterson fan! Well, I like some of his books anyways, I've only read four. When the Wind blows, The Lakehouse, and the Maximum Ride books. All were ...

Hey nice story.:) Thanks! Anything you see I could fix/work on?

I'm kind of annoyed at the story though. It seems like it is inappropriate for a prologue, perhaps it would be better if it was at the beginning of Chapter ...

Okay, thank you Ginny. I'd realize it was too long till you mentioned it but then I read it out loud and realized "wow, that's really long and annoying!" So ...

Second vignette, hope you like. My English teacher did at least. I got an A! Yay for me! Stones can be either very hot or very cold, depending on the ...

Use all caps only to make a really, really, really loud noise. Always use an exclamation mark and never use all caps frequently. I changed one of them I think, ...

Thanks for the advice. The reason there were no speech marks is because in the vignettes I was reading the author didn't use any and I though it might add ...